Listening to music is general in our life. People enjoy listening to music. Even wherever they go like hospital, restrooms,stores,street,and so on, they can listen to music
eaily. They think listening to music may be able
to help feel better and make life enjoy. Can you believe that living without music in your life? I have never thought that. I cannot imagine it. Music was kind of best friend from long times ago. Music was good for our mind and soul.
According to the article "Is music a good
tool for health?", Elizabeth Scott said music has a great effect on our body and
mind. In fact, there is a health care as music therapy, which uses music to
heal. People start to use music therapy to help patients in hospital as pain
management, depression, to promote movement, to calm patients, to ease muscle
tension, and other benefits. For example, researchers said fast beats of music
make people sharper concentration. And slower beats of music make people calm
and meditative state. The research means music can bring benefits to our state
of mind. In other example, breathing and heart rate may be affected by music.
Music can help prevent the bad effects of stress, not only relaxation, but also
health. So, people try to listen to music for bring a positive mind, helping to
keep depression, trying to control their feeling.
I totally agree
with Elizabeth's idea, because I always listen to music these days. Even when I
make- up, take a shower, walk on the street, go to school, take a subway, and so
on. These days, I had chronic stress and felt sad, but if I listened to music, I
felt like getting better. So, I love to listen to music and agree with
Elizabeth's idea.
In my experience, I had read newspaper a few months
ago. The article was about music class in hospital. These days, Doctors
recommend to patients to take music class whenever they want to take in
hopsital. Doctors and patients listen to music as fast beats and slower beats
and then they discuss about the music. And also sometimes they sing a song and
dance together in class. Doctors think music is good tool for preventing
patents' diseases. So, they are using music to heal. And also patients said when
they take the class, they can forget that they are sick at least during the
class. So, they are satisfied to taking the alss. They can keep tainking a
poistive way like music. Doctors and pateidnts can have a conversation each
other by music. The article was showing how music therapy is good for health. Even not only the patients felt good things from music therapy, but also doctors. In my opinion, when I read the article from newspaper, I was
surprised and I think the music class need to be popular in the world. And Even not patients, other people can enjoy with music and can be consoled from music. I think that is how music therapy works and what is the music to everyone.
Thus, Elizabeth Scott said music is a good tool for health, because
music can bring a more positive mind, help control our emotions, and make feel
better. And also poeple can react by music. So, I agree with Elizabeth's idea
that music is a good tool for health.
Garam, the first two paragraphs should be one, as they are really functioning as introduction. Even in the third one when you state "I totally agree with Elizabeth's idea" you do not identify which idea that is. The example you develop in the third paragraph is a good one, but not enough by itself to sustain the whole argument.
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